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I one knew a girl who died without a spot of blood on her.
Her sister wore a killer dress to the funeral.
It was black, of course, but probably too tight to be truly respectful.
Her Grandmother would have disapproved but the ceremony had made her reflect on her own life.
She wished not for time to set her affairs in order, but just that she was young enough to swing dance again.
She missed the war and the air force men that it brought through her life.
Her husband's plane had crashed forty three years too early for him to make it .
There was a space by the grave where he would have stood if he had ever known the girl buried there.
But he didn't.
That girl I knew knew how to live.
Untill one day, she died.
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I swing danced in a mosh pit on friday night.

I like the way you've managed to describe several characters along a varying timeline in a short amount of writing without it coming off disjointed in anyway. It flows nicely.
I don't think I make much sense... This is usually why I just say I like it and relate a funny story... I'll probably stick to that in future.

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or what?

"Music is no fucking joke" - Ian Mackaye
it wasn't really a full on mosh pit as it was a dancey mosh pit. People dancing so hard it hurt kinda dancing. Oh how my friend dean can twist.

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or what?

"Music is no fucking joke" - Ian Mackaye
those mosh pits are rad.

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A BOI-OI-OI
I really like the opening line of this. It adds an air of mystery, leaving you wondering how the girl died without a spot of blood, and then in the second line when you use the word "killer" to describe the dress the sister wore, it raises questions, like whether or not the sister was the murderer and stuff like that.
Bottom line: I like this.

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Eat your heart out, Wolfmother.
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~da-youth-crew - RIP
i should say bottom line more

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It's a very good phrase.

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Eat your heart out, Wolfmother.
-Colin Meloy, after performing "The Táin"

~da-youth-crew - RIP
almost as good as down-low

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Interesting piece. Sadly it's just so short.

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